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Topic - shopping mall / domestic business

To be true, the topic whether the development of mega-stores in this contemporary world would lead to extinction of domestic businesses drags our exigent attention because of its universality. Recalling last two decades reminds me of heated discussion regarding this intricate topic. In order to solve this enigmatic issue, different strata of society are in the state of schism, critics of either side provide veritable facts, some verdicts in favor of this statement, while others are antithetical. In my unfeigned opinion, I would go eye to eye with pundits, who are in term of approbation with this concept. Let’s zero in on affirmative arguments of the debate

To begin with, year in year out, the trade industry has made significant evolution, and shopping mall culture is at its heyday in recent times. There is no doubt that multipurpose shopping stores have brought more convenience in modern’s day lifestyle. For example, gone are the days, when purchasing house hold items were considered tedious job because of their random availability throughout the city which had resulted to loss of precious time. Furthermore, megastores have play areas for children and security systems as well, as a result of that people are more comfortable during shopping as their kids enjoy games during this time. Moreover, availability of toilets at shopping site is huge relief especially for younger and older populations, as a result of this senior citizens feels more comfortable during a visit to shopping malls. Finally, the temperature in shopping centers is maintained according to a season, and they create spellbinding atmosphere, as a consequence of that, people spend longer time during shopping and purchase the goods after full satisfaction. Therefore, people are more inclined to go in superstores to value their time and money.

On the meantime, after above development, local cultures and businesses are under imminent threat of getting closed. For instance, individual shops and small businesses are unable to afford modern day construction, advertisement of their products and more importantly quality. For this reason, public is losing interest in the local commodities. Additionally, shops in local towns are unable to keep pace with wide variety or products; resultantly, they excuse customers quite often which cause frustration in a buyer. Henceforth, domestic industry in future will no longer survive.

To make long story short, conclusion can be drawn from amalgamation of available cogent views that superstores are more beneficial in terms of easement, and traditional business would eventually die out due to lack of funds and marketing

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